in twitter i follow several poets from different countries and by happenstance saw poetic posts with the hashtag gogyohka and checked what it means.
#gogyohka is a new form of Japanese Poetry which simply means verse written in five lines. for a variety of tweet posts i gradually tried gogyohka and posted them as either #gpoem and #5lines. here are some of my favorite five lines.
| Eidolons~final~journey~ through~ the light |
in both
my early
and late moments
you crowd my thoughts
you saturate my emotions
sometimes
life isn't waiting
for the hurricane to pass
it's about learning
to unwind in the rain
will you believe me
when i say
i'm still here
loving you
quietly
when i'm
melancholy
i revisit your poetry
i still believe
you did cherish me
real people
aren't
perfect
perfect people
aren't real
i'm his magnum opus
he plays me nimbly
between pianissimo to fortissimo
allegro to virtuoso
until I reach grand crescendo
often
our lives
are punctuated
by moments
of staying or leaving
childhood memories
of agrarian
related follies
catching butterflies & fireflies
scared of goblin and fairies
grotesque pain
envelop me
as i close
life's incomplete
chapter
if I could choose
to be anywhere
with anyone
i'll always choose you
where ever you are
read me
when i'm silent
i may be crying inside
mulling a problem
needing a hug
sometimes it's
better to stop trying
to fix something broken
start all over
and create something better
gradually
the enigma
unravels
endearing
pieces of you
Really have enjoyed reading all of your poetry thoughts here on blog my favourite is above your gogyohka which is a mixture of many issues in life that you define in your use of poetry so well. I love the words read me when Im silent .. really beeutiful Del :) ThankQ so much for sharing your blog with me always beez :))
ReplyDeletei also loved that line * read me when i'm silent* ... From a poet extraordinaire i'm humbled Beez, thank you! (^_^)
ReplyDeleteThe thought process is versed in such tender manner that it is a pleasing experience to read the same gogyohka many times more. The pauses add to the substance. "when i'm/ melancholy/ i revisit your poetry/i still believe/ you did cherish me" :- I do believe you enter the mind and heart of the people who read your work - just keep it on.
ReplyDeleteThank you for visit and lovely comment Jyotindra this line resonates truth in my case:
ReplyDelete\when i'm \ melancholy \ i revisit your poetry \ i still believe \ you did cherish me\
It was a beautiful experience while it lasted, no regrets :)
Exactly what jmbhatt said so beautifully, with the addition of "provocative," as your blog has presented ideas to think about, twist about my brain... They seem planted specifically for me. What a gift!
ReplyDeleteHi Gabrielle thank you for dropping by and your thought provoking comment (^_^). are you also in twitter with same username?
ReplyDeletei'm glad you found them provocative.
every time i revisit the lines, they still resonate same feelings i had when they were written.
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ReplyDeleteHi, Ysabeluna!
ReplyDeleteIt is I, #lqw buddy @zenDecision, that is, Gabrielle/Gabriella Austen. [I let my personas duke it out!] :D
"every time i revisit the lines, they
still resonate same feelings i had
when they were written."
I know what you mean. When your heart writes the lines, it leaves a residue... that tracks back to you.
'Happy I found your blog...
hi again Gabrielle, indeed @zenDecision and i see in your bio that you are writing a novel. would be great to find time one day :). glad to join us in #lqw lexiplay and pleased that you saw my blog.
ReplyDeleteI am collating my recent & past tweets and photos to be posted soon as part of this blog in process, thank you for finding time to read.
Thank you.
ReplyDeleteI look forward to your tweet/photo combo posts and -- in the future -- your novel-writing days (we could commiserate: I'm so stuck in the editing/revising discipline stage).
Cheers.
Hi Del, I'm enjoying your blog! Looking over the comments here, I must agree with jmbhatt who said, "I do believe you enter the mind and heart of the people who read your work - just keep it on." So true! :-) Also,thank you for stopping by my blog and your kind words. Have a great day Del. Looking forward to your next post. John
ReplyDeleteJohn,
ReplyDeletei love checking out your blog for the vicarious trip while looking at the photos.
indeed, as i re-read the lines the feelings when i wrote them still resonate , i'm glad you share the same feelings. yes. i am in the processs of choosing materials for my next posts. thanks for dropping by John (^_^)